The graph below shows Twitter use by age group in the USA between November 2010 to May 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevent.

The graph below shows Twitter use by age group in the USA between November 2010 to May 2013.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevent.
The graph gives information about the usage of
Twitter
by a range of age groups from November 2010 to May 2013 in the USA.
Overall
, most of the
Twitter
users were adults including 18-29 and 30-49 aged groups between given
years
;
however
, the eldest individuals
such
as 50-65 and
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were not eager to have a
Twitter
account from 2010 to 2013. In more
details
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, in
the
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November
2010
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2010,
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the youngest
Twitter
users from 18 to 29
years
old were 15% and it raised slightly throughout the
years
and reached
to
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its pick point in
the
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December 2012
as well as
dipped up to
the
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May 2013.
Furthermore
, using
Twitter
by
30
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-49
aged
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group started from 5% in 2010 and smoothly increased by 17% in 2013. In terms of seniors, the percentage of 50-65
years
old people who were using
Twitter
, showed a bit
rise
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from November 2010 to May 2013 respectively 5% and 12%.
In addition
, 65 and
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only explore some fluctuations
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the period.
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