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The graph gives information about the percentage of the population of four different Asian countries living in cities between 1970 and 2020, with additional predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The graph gives information about the percentage of the population of four different Asian countries living in cities between 1970 and 2020, with additional predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph provides information about the percentage of the
population
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 of South East
Asia
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 countries which was earned every year from 1970 until 2020 with predictions for 2030 and 2040
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, what stands out from the graph is that there were considerable upward trends in the
population
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all
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of all
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 of the Nations in South East
Asia
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,
while
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 the residents of the
Phillipines
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Philippines
 witnessed a considerable fall from
the
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apply
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1990 until 2010 but it increased again and
join
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joined
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the others trend
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the trend of the other
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. Another interesting point is,
Indonesia
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that Indonesia
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 holds
the
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apply
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second place
in
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at
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 the end of 2020
whereas
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 previously in 1970 it held the
last
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 rank with a small
population
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 in the city.
In contrast
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, the amount of
population
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 that living in the cities in the South East
Asia
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 went up by
steady
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a steady
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 percentage. The prediction on 2030 until 2040 all of the South East
Asia
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 countries will experience a steady rise, especially Thailand.
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, the South East
Asia
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population
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 around their town ended in minimum accretion above six
percent
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per cent
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 in 2040.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 2 times.
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