The chart below shows participation in certain leisure activities by children in Australia. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

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The bar graphs above illustrate the Australian kids' activities in their leisure time in

age

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the age

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range

five

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of five

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to fourteen years

olds

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old

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. It can be clearly seen, that watching TV is all time

children'

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children's

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favourite, whilst

skate boarding

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skateboarding

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is the least favourite

among

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all.

However

, the graphs

also

show the

difference

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different

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trend

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trends

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between the

boys

and

girls

in activities selection. Rollerblading is played the most by around 40% of

boys

, whilst only below 30% of

girls

playing

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play

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skate.

Moreover

, nearly 75%

boys

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of boys

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are riding

the

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apply

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bikes and

girls

just around 60% that seems like the activity.

Nevertheless

, for

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the tv

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program, the number

among

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girls

and

boys

are

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exactly the same,

reach

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reaching

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100% which

the

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is the

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highest percentage of all.

In addition

, the computer games have 80% of young

man

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men

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play it,

in contrast

, young ladies are less likely to engage in electronic games which

only

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is only

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60%.

The art

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Art

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and craft

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are

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the least

boys

' favourite activities

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30%,

on the contrary

, the majority of

girls

are

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apply

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choose craft

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apply

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almost 60%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words boys, girls with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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7Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
23Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

169 words

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Clear and correct grammar

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