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museums
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so that
visitors
could have a joyful
experience
.
However
, Many argue that
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only.
For
visitors
may learn
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historical past ,
children
must
experience
cultural depth and many more. In my opinion,
museum
authorities must bring a balance between the
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two aspects,
therefore
,
visitors
could have a well-rounded educational
experience
associated with colourful memories.
On the one hand, proponents advocate that
museums
must bring entertainment
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experience
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. They argue that entertainment activities
such
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for
children
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adults or
children
,
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activities in which parents and their
children
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to the family.
Hence
, the amount of
will gradually increase. They
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present ideas,
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around corners all over the
museum
will help
children
focus on the essentials as nobody could focus on a hungry
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they should include to enhance the quality of
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.
On the other hand
, opponents advocate that the purpose of the
museum
is to provide
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experience
to the
children
as well as
citizens. All the historical background of the country should be shown in the
to provide
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experience
and foster a culturally enriched society.
Furthermore
,
Museums
should enhance their ways to provide knowledgeable
experience
.
For instance
, giving the
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a viewpoint where they could feel the narrative on why their forefathers have
so hard and the present moment of freedom they are experiencing is the result of their forefather's sacrifice.
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will be more culturally stronger, historically enriched and wiser individuals and
this
experience
must go on to foster a vibrant society.
In conclusion, both sides present strong arguments.
However
, I opine that
museums
should strike a balance between these two aspects to provide a wholesome
experience
of enriched culture, stronger
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views and equally an enjoyable
experience
to the
visitors
. Education mixed with joyful
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loving
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will bring more value and foster well-rounded, educated individuals.
Hence
, these mesmerising
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will help by bringing many
visitors
to the
.