In marriages today, some argue that it is the rosponsibility of both spouses to earn a living for the family. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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people
belive
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believe
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to take
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in taking
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responsibility equally. Nowadays men and women
both
knows each
others
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other's
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responsibility and
tuning
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tune in
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with each other to
develope
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develop
better relationship and understanding. I strongly
belive
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believe
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tht
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that
if
both
person
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people
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earn
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earns
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for
family
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their family
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they make
good
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a good
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living
experiance
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experiences
for
them self
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themself
themselves
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and
as well as
for their parents and children.
In
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the
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this
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time
, full of technologies are in
market
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the market
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and it
also
increase
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increases
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the living standards. Many
people
are busy
in
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apply
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earning and at that
time
,
the
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apply
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technology
help
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helps
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to relax in
houshold
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household
things.
for example
,
dishwasher
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the dishwasher
a dishwasher
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is expensive but it
reduce
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reduces
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the
hardwark
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hardware
and
also
save
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saves
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time
,
same
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the same
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for
washing
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the washing
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machine and
newly
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tehnologies
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technologies
are better improved from the past like we have to transfer the
cloths
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clothes
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from
spinner
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the spinner
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to
drier
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the drier
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and now
the
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both
work done in one drum, it
make
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makes
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work easy so
people
can relax in that
mean
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meantime
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time
. As
both
partners earn bread and butter for
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the family
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family
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the family
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, they can save
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a good
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good
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a good
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amount and
also
plan their vacation with family. In emergency
time
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times
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they can
also
depend on their own, they do not have to ask
other
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others
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for
helps
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help
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. For that kind of living standard, it is good to earn
toghether
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together
.
In
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On
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opposite
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the opposite
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,
theire
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there
are some
people
who
belive
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believe
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that the earning
works
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work
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are
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is
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always done by men and the
houshold
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household
works
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work
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are only
made
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done
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for women. In that thinking
people
forget to
develope
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develop
their mutual understanding with
partner
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their partner
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,
self growth
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self-growth
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and
also
they
decreased
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the source of income. At
that
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that,
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they have less saving and
the
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apply
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only one or two
house men
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housemen
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earn
that
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which
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lead them
stress
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to stress
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. In my opinion,
I
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apply
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to better living standard they have to earn together. It makes
both
partner
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partners
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self
indipendant
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independent
and they can lean
each
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on each
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other for mental peace.
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  • marriages
  • responsibility
  • earn a living
  • families
  • spouses
  • financial contributions
  • equality
  • financial independence
  • freedom
  • choices
  • division of responsibility
  • burden
  • share responsibilities
  • work-life balance
  • relationships
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