In marriages today, some argue that it is the rosponsibility of both spouses to earn a living for the family. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Many
people
belive
Correct your spelling
believe
to take
responsibility equally. Nowadays men and women Change preposition
in taking
both
knows each others
responsibility and Change to a genitive case
other's
tuning
with each other to Wrong verb form
tune in
develope
better relationship and understanding. I strongly Correct your spelling
develop
belive
Correct your spelling
believe
tht
if Correct your spelling
that
both
person
Change to a plural noun
people
earn
for Change the verb form
earns
family
they make Correct pronoun usage
their family
good
living Correct article usage
a good
experiance
for Correct your spelling
experiences
them self
and Correct your spelling
themself
themselves
as well as
for their parents and children.
In
Change preposition
At
the
Correct determiner usage
this
time
, full of technologies are in market
and it Add an article
the market
also
increase
the living standards. Many Change the verb form
increases
people
are busy in
earning and at that Change preposition
apply
time
, the
technology Correct article usage
apply
help
to relax in Correct subject-verb agreement
helps
houshold
things. Correct your spelling
household
for example
, dishwasher
is expensive but it Add an article
the dishwasher
a dishwasher
reduce
the Change the verb form
reduces
hardwark
and Correct your spelling
hardware
also
save
Correct subject-verb agreement
saves
time
, same
for Correct article usage
the same
washing
machine and Correct article usage
the washing
newly
Change the word
new
tehnologies
are better improved from the past like we have to transfer the Correct your spelling
technologies
cloths
from Correct your spelling
clothes
spinner
to Correct article usage
the spinner
drier
and now Correct article usage
the drier
the
Remove the article
apply
both
work done in one drum, it make
work easy so Change the verb form
makes
people
can relax in that mean
Correct your spelling
meantime
time
. As both
partners earn bread and butter for Correct article usage
the family
family
, they can save Correct article usage
the family
Correct article usage
a good
good
amount and Correct article usage
a good
also
plan their vacation with family. In emergency time
they can Fix the agreement mistake
times
also
depend on their own, they do not have to ask other
for Fix the agreement mistake
others
helps
. For that kind of living standard, it is good to earn Change the wording
help
bits of help
toghether
.
Correct your spelling
together
In
Change preposition
On
opposite
, Correct article usage
the opposite
theire
are some Correct your spelling
there
people
who belive
that the earning Correct your spelling
believe
works
Fix the agreement mistake
work
are
always done by men and the Correct subject-verb agreement
is
houshold
Correct your spelling
household
works
are only Fix the agreement mistake
work
made
for women. In that thinking Verb problem
done
people
forget to develope
their mutual understanding with Correct your spelling
develop
partner
, Correct pronoun usage
their partner
self growth
and Add a hyphen
self-growth
also
they decreased
the source of income. At Wrong verb form
decrease
that
they have less saving and Add a comma
that,
the
only one or two Correct article usage
apply
house men
earn Correct your spelling
housemen
that
lead them Correct pronoun usage
which
stress
.
In my opinion, Fix the infinitive
to stress
I
to better living standard they have to earn together. It makes Correct pronoun usage
apply
both
partner
self Fix the agreement mistake
partners
indipendant
and they can lean Correct your spelling
independent
each
other for mental peace.Change preposition
on each
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