IT IS BELIEVED BY SOME SOCITIES THAT DURING THE YEAR 2050, FACE-TO-FACE CLASSESS WILL NOT BE APPLICABLE. DESPITE THE ENHANCEMENT OF TECHNOLOGY IN THE FUTURE, I BELIEVE THAT IT IS BETTER TO HOLD REGULAR CLASSES DUE TO COMMUNICATION BARRIER, SOCIALIZATION, AND HEALTH EFFECT.
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occurred
in several decades ahead will be more improved which Correct pronoun usage
that occurred
make
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makes
students
should not need to go to school
. Firstly
, by implying online classes, students
do not need to consume much time to prepare for school
. For example
, students
in several high schools now spend approximately one hour to reach school
, and it makes them tired in the morning, thus
by
opening Change preposition
apply
laptop
and camera right after Correct article usage
a laptop
morning
routine will cut that event which is more efficient. Correct article usage
the morning
Secondly
, the learning process will be more effective because the time which
used to study can be used well. As an illustration, Correct pronoun usage
apply
school
learning hours
should be 8 hours
, in fact, it only consumes about 6 hours
effective
because most of them tend to play and chat with their friends, Correct word choice
apply
that is
why online learning is better because students
cannot communicate during learning time.
On the other hand
, I would argue that face-to-face classes will always be a crucial system
for several reasons. For one reason, there will be communication barriers such
as bad internet signals and internet access that
is
not evenly distributed in all places during online learning. Correct subject-verb agreement
are
For instance
, when COVID-19 hit, the learning system
changed to online, based on the data from Ministry
of Education of Indonesia, 37% of children in inland Correct article usage
the Ministry
area
, Change the noun form
areas
such
as Papua, cannot study well because
the lack of facilities like Add the preposition
because of
laptop
and WiFi. Another reason is that they have Fix the agreement mistake
laptops
limit
resources Replace the word
limited
to
socialization because they have no extracurricular Change preposition
for
as well as
not meet their peers. These activities are important so that they can expand their relationship with others and have discussion partners. In addition
, watching computer
for long Correct article usage
a computer
hours
can disturb children’s health due to
explosion
of light from Correct article usage
the explosion
screen
which can cause eye problems. Based on the data from HealthCare.com, after the pandemic, many Add an article
the screen
a screen
students
come to the optic to have their eyes checked and turned that
90% of them experience Myopia.
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and
To conclude
, although
there are several merits regarding technology for studying, I strongly disagree that learning activity
should be done that way. It will Fix the agreement mistake
activities
better
to stay in Add a missing verb
be better
traditional
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the traditional
system
because of
some reasons I aforementioned. Change preposition
for
Therefore
, I suggest the government to make the
enhancement of technology as a support for education, not to exchange the Correct article usage
apply
system
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