The chart below shows the aid from six developed countries to developing countries from 2008 to 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph demonstrates how much assistance
that
six developed Correct determiner usage
the
countries
provided to developing countries
between 2008 and 2010, which are the US, Germany, the UK, Japan
, Neterland
, and Correct your spelling
Netherlands
Netherland
Sweden
.
Of all the six nations, the US offered the largest financial support in the whole period, which were
over 20 Correct subject-verb agreement
was
billions
in each year. In the three years, the aid from the US increased in total, Change to singular
billion
while
it shows a two-million drop in 2009 and a remarkable increase in 2010 to 25. Similarly
, both the UK and Japan
experienced a
up and down simultaneously from 2008 to 2010. The UK engaged in helping the developing Change the article
an
countries
the most actively in 2010(for 13 billion
), while
Japan
in 2008(for 12 billion
).
Correct article usage
The Netherland
Netherland
and Fix the agreement mistake
Netherlands
Sweden
provided the smallest amount of money to those poor countries
, both of them in the three years were merely under 10 billion
. They all donated the most in 2009, and Correct article usage
the Netherland
Netherland
showed a rising trend Fix the agreement mistake
Netherlands
overall
, while
Sweden
maintain
the same number as the beginning(7 Wrong verb form
maintained
billion
). By contrast
, the aid from Germany kept a constantly growing tendency, which was 10 in 2008 and reached to
15 in the end.
Change preposition
apply
To sum up
, all the other countries
represented a growth during the three years except Japan
and Sweden
. And it is worth to to
mention that Germany was the only one that steadily rose between 2008 and 2010.Remove the redundancy
apply
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