Some people believe that professional athletes serve as positive role models for young people, while others argue that their behavior both on and off the field has a negative influence. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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on their followers.

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think that professional

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have a positive impact as models for young

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others argue the opposite. In my opinion, even if some professional

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don't have the best attitude or behaviour they can still be a better

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than any other famous person.

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, the main reason why some professional

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negative role models is because their attitude can be rude. Whenever they lose a game, or something they didn't expect to happen they can show a rude attitude. Proof of

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is all the tennis players who break their racquet when they lose a game, like Serena Williams or Roger Federer. Young

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can copy these actions and that's why others argue they can be a bad

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, professional

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can be a very positive

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is all the ones that have inspired kids or teenagers to practice any sport. In my experience, since I was a kid, Serena Williams has always been a role model for me because she proves that a woman tennis player can be as good as a man. Recently Coco Gauff won the U.S Open and that was very inspiring for me too because as a 19-year-old, she showed me what

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of my age can achieve with hard work. Many

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have inspired not only me but thousands of young

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too and that behaviour is the only that matters

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inspiring others. Even though professional

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can commit mistakes, as any other person, they still are a better

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than anybody. They inspire young

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to achieve their dreams and prove that with hard work anything can be possible.

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discipline
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Some people believe that professional athletes serve as positive role models for young people, while others argue that their behavior both on and off the field has a negative influence. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

These days, in many countries, fewer and fewer people want to become teachers, particularly in secondary schools. What are the reasons for this, and how could the problem be solved?

It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going university. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

Some people think that the parents of children who commit crimes should also receive a punishment

Some people think that with the increasing use of mobile phones and computers, people lose the ability to communicate face to face. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?