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You should spend about 20 minutes on the task. The maps below show the layout of James Park in 2017 and the proposed changes to the park in 2027. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

You should spend about 20 minutes on the task. The maps below show the layout of James Park in 2017 and the proposed changes to the park in 2027. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words
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The maps illustrate the difference in the layout of James
Park
 before and after the redevelopment program.
Overall
, the
park
 has become bigger, and 15000 more users are estimated to visit the
park
montly
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monthly
 in 2027 when compared to 2017. On the one hand, the statue and the main playground, present in the middle and west
side
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sides
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 of the map respectively, have not changed post-renovation.
However
,
on the other hand
,in
few
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a few
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 areas, facilities have been either expanded, added, or replaced.
Firstly
, the fountain is replaced by a small garden, and the toddler playground
hs
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has
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 been changed into a theater area.
Secondly
, a gymnasium is added right below the playground, to the
south-west
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southwest
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 side of the map.
Additionally
, the science
center
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centre
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 has been expanded to the east side.
Lastly
, many paths have been paved to connect facilities to each other. In conclusion, the development program added more facilities to the
park
such
 as
Gymnasium
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a Gymnasium
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 and
theater
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theatre
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.
This
 has attracted a larger audience.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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