The charts show projections for global production by sector in 2040 and 2060.

The charts show projections for global production by sector in 2040 and 2060.
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The pie charts illustrate predictions for international manufacturing by field between 2040 and 2060.
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it is clear that
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the services and manufacturing are expected to be higher than
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. Obviously, it is predicted that the proportion of energy and agriculture will undergo a decline,
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the opposite trend will be true for the rest of the sectors. Regarding the percentage of services and manufacturing, there will be a significant rise from 31% and 40% to 33% and 41% respectively over 20 year
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period.
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, a similar trend could be seen in the rate of materials and info-com tech,which
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slightly from 3% and 15% in 2040 to 4% and 16% in 2060 in turn. The period between 2040 and 2060 is estimated will undergo a trivial decline
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% and 7% to 5% and 1% correspondingly in the figures of energy and agriculture.
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