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The graph below shows the proposition of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

The graph below shows the proposition of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.
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The given line graph describes the projected percentages of seniors in the USA, Sweden, and Japan in
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 century from 1940 to 2040. It can be seen from the graph that a predicted proportion of the elderly will experience considerable growth in
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the three
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 nations. It is noticeable that
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 the percentages of old
people
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 in the US and Sweden were considerably higher compared with Japan for most of the period, the prediction reveals that there will be an increase, even surpassing the other two nations by Japan in the number of old
people
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 in 2040. The elderly in the United States and Sweden accounted for 9% and 7% in 1940, respectively. Both experienced some variations and are expected to increase by 2040.
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 the American old
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 reached 23%, the Swedish surpassed the USA and ranked second with 25%. The Japanese ageing rate stood at 5% in 1940,
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 underwent some fluctuations, and is predicted to increase dramatically to 10% in 2030. Between 2030 and 2040, the number of
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 is estimated to rise sharply, reaching its highest point of 27% by the end of the period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 2 times.
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