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The bar chart shows the number of tourists visiting Country X from various parts of the world and the table displays the income of different businesses in the nation in 2007 and 2008.

The bar chart shows the number of tourists visiting Country X from various parts of the world and the table displays the income of different businesses in the nation in 2007 and 2008.
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The bar chart indicates the
number
 of foreigners
come
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coming
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 to X from different nations of the world and the table
show
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shows
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how
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apply
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much
income
 of different businesses in 2007 and 2008.
Overall
, the
number
 of
visitors
 from different countries visiting X in 2007
are dominating
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dominated
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 in 2007 compared to 2008,
as well as
severasl
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severe
 tourism industry
gain
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gained
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 higher
income
 in 2007
as a result
. The highest
number
 of tourists from Europe,
US
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the US
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 and Canada, China and Japan, and Australia were in 2007. There
was
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were
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 around 3000
thousandss
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thousands
thousand
 of Chinese and Japanese people visiting X country in 2007 which was the biggest
number
 of
visitors
. The rest
passangers
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passengers
 from Europe,
US
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the US
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and
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apply
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Canada, and Australia were between 2000 and 3000
thousands
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thousand
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 in 2007.
However
, in 2008 the
visitors
 mostly came from Australia with more than 2
millions
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million
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 people. Followed by China and Japan with 2 millions of tourists. Meanwhile, Europe and US and Canada were no more than 1
illionss
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millions
 of
visitors
. Some of the tourism industries
such
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apply
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shows
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show
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the
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apply
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reasonable
income
 in 2007 where the highest annual
income
 was in 2007.
Especially hotel
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Hotel
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 and
resort
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resorts
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were manage
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managed
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 to earn seven times
annual
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the annual
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income
 in 2007 compared to 2008, which was 3.5 million dollars. The same trends were
showed
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shown
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 as well for the rest industries which
were earn
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earned
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 higher
income
 in 2007 rather than
2008
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in 2008
show examples
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, income, visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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