The diagram below show the results of a survey from Taiwan explaining how students wanting to study overseas, chose a university from 1998-2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below show the results of a survey from Taiwan explaining how students wanting to study overseas, chose a university from 1998-2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table depicts the results survey percentages of choosing
university
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of male and female
students
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in Taiwan who
want
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wanted
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to study abroad
since
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from
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1998 to 2008.
Overall
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, the average percentages of male and female standards in choosing
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university
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a university
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were not immensely different.
Moreover
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, male
students
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considered increasing choosing their
university
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based on
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cost
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the cost
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of tuition and location,
while
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the
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apply
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female
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females
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had more typical
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university
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universities
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by
years
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the years
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.
Also
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, the female
students
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show
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few
of
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standards decrease in three aspects,
whereas
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the male had six.
To begin
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, the male
students
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who
choose
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chose
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a
university
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based on
it
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its
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cost
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of tuition and location
in
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from
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1998 to 2008 were highly increased from 88% to 97% and 18% to 32% respectively.
On the contrary
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,
Female
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Females
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had more
slightly
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slight
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rise in selecting a
university
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based on five aspects namely
cost
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of tuition (93% to 95%), location (11% to 25%), modern teaching facilities (72% to 76%), quality of teachers (5% to 7%), and
cost
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of accommodation (91% to 93%).
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,
in
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from
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1998 to 2008, both
male
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males
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and
female
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females
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decreased in
few
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a few
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aspects of choosing a
university
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.
Male
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Males
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had lessened percentages in
university
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ranking (97% to 95%), modern teaching facilities (66% to 42%), good language support (73% to 61%), quality of teachers (13% to 6%),
cost
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of accommodation (92% to 86%), modern teaching methods (8% to 7%).
While
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, female
students
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were less
consider
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considered
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to choose a
university
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abroad in ranking (100% to 90%), good language support (39% to 21%), and modern teaching methods (5% to 2%).
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words university, students, cost with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
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