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The old generation often hold traditional ideas about the correct way of life, thinking and behavior. However, some people think that these ideas are not helpful for young people to prepare for modern life. To what extent do agree or disagree?

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Elderly people may suggest
old fashion
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ideas
 regarding the right methods of life,
that
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which
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 include thinking and
act
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acting
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. But others find these
ideas
 are outdated and not suitable for
the
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apply
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young children. In my opinion, every generation
have
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 its own
challanges
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challenges
 and solutions that only apply
in
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at
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 a certain time.
However
, some
ideas
 can be recreated and be used in
modren
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modern
sitiuations
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situations
situation
.
Firstly
, traditional
ideas
 may lead the kids to success but not directly, parents can pass their own experience to their own children which
then
 can be used in a different way.
On the other hand
, the communities
nowdays
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is
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 different than it was,
therefore
, applying old ways of life can lead to failure in most cases. Taking technology as an example, children may ask for advice from teens about a topic related to
internet
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 rather than asking old people. In the end, young kids may
adapt
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adopt
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 traditional ways of
lifing
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life
 and use it in newer
version
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versions
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.
However
, not all methods work in modern life.
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