The line graph and bar chart illustrate the average monthly rainfall and temperature in one area of East Africa.

The line graph and bar chart illustrate the average monthly rainfall and temperature in one area of East Africa.
The line and bar chart
depicts
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the Rainfall and temperature degree in a specific spot of East Africa that has been measured in average months. it is clear from the graph that In Apr and Mar, Rainfall and heat reached the highest point, respectively. In Jul both of them were noticed to be the lowest. As shown in the graph above the heat rose and fell starting from Jun to Dec.
However
, the weather was in moderate condition with approximately 20 degrees
overall
.
Furthermore
, Jun, Jul, Aug and Sep have the coldest weather and the least rainfall.
Similarly
, Jan and Feb have lower degrees too, but with a significant increase when it comes to climate. In both months Mar and Oct, the weather condition has gone to the peak compared with other months.
Lastly
, a moderate level of rain was found in May, Oct and Nov. In conclusion, the perfect condition in the area has been found in the middle of the year in terms of climate degree and rain measurement. Apr has the worst natural situation in both cases.
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