the share of income earned by the top 1 percent from 1975 to 2015.

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The line chart provides information about how much income was earned by the Top 1 Percent in 7 different countries between 1975 and 2015. As an

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trend,

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the United States increased its

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, compared to other countries.

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Germany, Canada and the United Kingdom held the second position in income

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. In terms of France, Italy and Japan, they fluctuated all over the period and reached nearly the same level. Now, turning to the details, in 1975 among the highest countries Germany started at 10 percent and had considerable drops and jumps between 7 and 11 till 2015. And

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it went up to approximately 14 in 2010. The United States, Canada and France began at the same data around 8, but

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the United States experienced a dramatic rocket with fluctuations, reaching 9 in 1985, 13 in 1990, accompanied by marginal drops, 16 in 2000 and the peak at 18 in 2015. Canada and the United Kingdom

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in 1990 at 10 and increased significantly in 2000 to around 13. After that, they reached

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peak in 2010 and a little bit worsened

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in 2015 to 12. France held the

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same position throughout the year with negligible changes, starting from 8 in 1975 to 9 in 2015. In terms of Italy and Japan, it is

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identical trends. In the first decade they rose slightly from 8 to 8,

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Italy increased strikingly to 9 in 2010,

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Japan had a considerable fall in 1990 to 7 and

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soared in the same year,

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Italy in 2010

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Provide a clearer introduction that includes the main trend.

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Organize the body paragraphs more effectively by discussing each country separately and providing a summary afterwards.

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Use more precise and varied vocabulary to describe the data.

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Pay attention to subject-verb agreement and improve the overall sentence structure.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

268 words

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the share of income earned by the top 1 percent from 1975 to 2015.

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robots and artificial intelligence are being developed to replace humans in the workplace. why is this happening do you think this will have a positive or negative impact on society?

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