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Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. Why? What will be effects on society?​

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It is true that these days, many countries just have a few
students
 who want to study
science
subjects
 when they are college
students
.
This
 can be attributed to several factors, which can lead to some negative consequences. There are various reasons why many
students
 choose to study social
subjects
 at university. One possible explanation is that
science
subjects
 often require much independent study which
daunt
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 for
students
 who prefer a structured learning environment.
Thus
, these
students
 spend a lot of time studying
science
subjects
 for which they have no passion and
then
 they fall behind in their studies. These requirements of
science
subjects
 deterred
students
 from choosing these
subjects
. Another reason worth mentioning is the lack of modern laboratory equipment to do research in their
science
 fields. Many
students
 do not have many opportunities to put theory into practice, so it is difficult to develop their careers.
As a result
, the lack of modern laboratory equipment deters
students
 from choosing
science
subjects
. There are many problems resulting from the shortage of the number of
students
 who choose
science
subjects
.The first issue is a need for more skilled professionals in technique and technology which hinder innovation and progress. Example for, healthcare in which technological advances are critical to providing better treatments stands in need of healthcare professionals but the number of doctors in the country is not enough. they recruit foreign doctors who communicate in foreign languages to meet patient needs so language barriers lead to misunderstanding each other.
As a consequence
, that affects poorer quality healthcare services and negatively affects
people
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well-being. In conclusion, many reasons can be given to explain the decline in
science
students
, and
this
 can give rise to many issues.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • deter
  • promotion
  • opportunities
  • role models
  • lucrative
  • employment
  • gender stereotypes
  • societal norms
  • access to information
  • technological stagnation
  • shortage
  • skilled professionals
  • innovation
  • healthcare sector
  • workforce
  • global competitiveness
  • advancements
  • economic growth
  • public health services
  • environmental sciences
  • combat climate change
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