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the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

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The table shows the
numbers
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number
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 of
visitors
 to
Ashdown
Museum
 during the year before and after it was refurbished.The
charts
 show the results of Surveys asking
visitors
 how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Amount of
Visitors
 is illustrated by the table to
Ashdown
museum
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Museum
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 before and after
of
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apply
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its
refurbishment
.The pie
Charts
 depicts
result
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the result
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 of surveys asking
visitors
 how satisfied they were with their tour, during the same two periods.
Overall
,
number
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the number
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 of
Visitors
 dramatically increased from 74,000 to 92,000 after the
renovation
 of
Ashdown
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the Ashdown
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museum
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Museum
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.Pie
charts
shows
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 that
visitors
 are more satisfied and less dissatisfied after the
refurbishment
. Looking more closely at the pie
charts
, the number of very satisfied
were
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was
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 15 before the
renovation
whereas
, it
rised
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rose
rises
 to 35 after the construction.
Moreover
, before the
refurbishment
 of
Ashdown
museum
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Museum
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 ratio of satisfied
visitors
were
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was
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 30,
however
, it increased to 40 after the
renovation
.
Furthermore
,
dissatisfied
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the dissatisfied
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 proportion was 40, which decreased to 15 after the
refurbishment
.The number of very dissatisfied was 10
on the Contrary
, it declined to 5.The ratio of
no response
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visitors
remain
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remains
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 constant before and after
renovation
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • refurbishment
  • visitor numbers
  • satisfaction levels
  • survey results
  • very satisfied
  • improved facilities
  • exhibits
  • attendance
  • comparison
  • increase/decrease
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