More and more international companies are investing and locating their business in foreign country. What problems will local communities face with and what can be done ?

In
this
globalization era, international companies are growing faster and expanding their operations in different countries.
Due to
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the expansion
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of foreign businesses, new job opportunities are created and foreign direct investments (FDI) are promoted in the host
country
.
However
,
this
can bring harm to local industries,
enviromental
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environmental
exploitation and unfair competition in the market. There are several problems
can
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be
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arised
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arise
while
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when
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a foreign
business
starts to operate in a new
country
.
Firstly
, the company brings unusual competition to the local players as it brings
a lots
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a lot
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of investment
whereas
local
companies
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companies are
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unable to cope
up
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.
For example
, a
foriegn
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foreign
business
entity can recruit
professional
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professionals
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with higher salaries
than
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and remuneration than the local organizations
,
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and can establish industry
equipments
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equipment
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which might not be
environemnt
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environment
friendly.
Secondly
, it can introduce new products which might not be accepted well in the host
country
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country's
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culture.
Nevertheless
, to permit
a
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FDI or foreign
business
to come,
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
or the regulatory authority
take
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some significant actions
for taking
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to take
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care of the problems.
Goverment
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Government
can impose high tariffs or taxes to limit foreign
business
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businesses
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to invade
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from invading
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into
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local markets.
Also
,
business
regulatory
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should monitor
on
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the product
line ups
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, as it doesn't collide with local cultures.
For example
, an international Chain like KFC can't
intruduce
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introduce
a product which
are
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not halal in a Muslim
country
.
Additionaly
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Additionally
, local organizations should be waived for taxes and other surcharges as
it
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they
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can survive in the market with
a
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positive growth. Though
foriegn
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foreign
business
contributes
in
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to
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the economic growth
in
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of
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a host
country
, authorities should monitor and restrict the terms and conditions to keep their local businesses up and running.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Foreign direct investment
  • Globalization
  • International corporations
  • Local economy
  • Job creation
  • Resource allocation
  • Cultural diversity
  • Infrastructure development
  • Environmental conservation
  • Exploitation
  • Transparency
  • Accountability
  • Regulations
  • Fair competition
  • Cultural exchange
  • Ethical business practices
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