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What changes in the employment have there been in recent years in your country?

In the
last
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 decade, in my
country
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, there have been
made
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some innovations in respect to the
work
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 environment, especially after the pandemic. It is a fact that
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 those changes, workers have changed some rules in working conditions to the positive side. In
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 essay, I will present some of the arguments and
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give my considerations to those transformations. In times of the pandemic, employment had to change as nobody could attend to their job,
as
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people
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 were obligated to
work
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 from their homes for the elimination of
Covid-19
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COVID-19
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. After the virus was decreased, employers kept those conditions
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 the convenience of their employees. Another innovation that employment has,
are
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the
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flexible working
hours
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. The fixable, strict 9:00-17:00
hours
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 have gone in many companies in my
country
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, and have let the workers decide which
hours
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 to
work
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 during the day, as long as the demands of the
work
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 are done properly. By that, it is estimated that the productivity from the
people
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 who
work
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 have been increased. An especially important change
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 concerned, is that
people
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 can
work
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 from another
country
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,
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 the increase of usage of computers in jobs.
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 that, a manager is able to have an essential meeting in an extension office in another
country
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 without get up from his chair.
Last
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 but not least, is that workers have more rights from the employees which had 30 years ago.
People
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, in fact, have given so many demonstrations for their privileges as workes, that the employers have the obligation to maintain them. If
for example
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 the boss of a company force the subordinates to
work
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 more than 8hours per day, individuals have the right to indict the boss for infringement of human rights. Unlikely, 20 years ago something like that wouldn't be able to happen. In conclusion, there have been a lot of changes corresponding to employment, which have been made the
people
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's life more easy. In fact i consider to beleive that the transformations that were made during the
last
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 decade are important for a better working environment.

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