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Every year several languages die out. Some poeple think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are few langauges in the world. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this option.

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In some
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countries'
 mother tongues have been forgotten and neglected
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people
poeple
 each year.
One
 group of people believe that the
world
 having
one
linguistic
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language
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 will make
poeple's
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people's
 lives comfortable. In my opinion, I agree with the statement as it will help in
build
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 up peace with communities and distribute knowledge and technologies
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all around the
world
.
Although
,
one
 negative impact will be losing a part of a
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community's
community
 identity and originality. The
world
 has seen
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 of wars and battles
through out
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throughout
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the
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history.
One
 reason is the cultural, social and political differences societies had. Language
barrier
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 could lead to misunderstanding between
poeple
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people
 which could result in having raw with each other that could end up with fighting. Being able to communicate freely will bring many nations to nurture their minds with ideas and other ways of living. If all the countries share the same language, it could help in knowledge distribution
among
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 the
world
 very easily and quickly.
This
 can result in
increase
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 in development in many motherlands. It
also
 helps to share new research findings where other
poeple
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people
 use it to develop and find new experiments. As the
world
 is using the Arabic numerical system it has contributed to the
advacement
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advancement
 of physics and mathematics because the laws and theories can be applied by all the
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people
 around the globe.
Therefore
,
although
 losing
native
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 language could have a negative impact on
one
's cultural value, it carries more benefits to the
world
 by ensuring
world
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knowledge.
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