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Some people believe that schools should teach foreing langauges for primary school children. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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There is a view that foreign languages should be taught to the children since they are six years old.
While
 doing so might help them to use their brain learning functions at
early
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 stage and access to knowledge treasure of humankind, I believe that drawbacks are more significant. The upsides of learning a language for minors are in plain sight. One is using their brain functions at early stages which are extremely fresh. If
this
 process is done at
this
 period, the more they are likely to remember and use their memory to accomplish
this
 as much as they can.
Besides
,
this
 might affect their academic programs as well. Another benefit, in the long term of their
life
, they can easily have access treasures of humankind. For, say, if youngsters learn English as a second language, they can fulfil any questions that make them wonder, as in recent years most of the scientific data have been published in English. These advantages pale in comparison with the drawbacks, the first of which is the negative impact on their
life
 experience. If most children snow under with their studies, and with the pressure to excel academically, they might lose their
life
 knowledge and competencies because of time.
For instance
, if they are not good at communicating with people, leading to misunderstandings, their business can be screwed up when they grow up. The most significant are physical and mental effects Being compelled to
this
 task in learning, they will have less time to move, exercise and play outside,
as a result
, their body’s metabolism can be diminished.
Furthermore
, they can easily contrast diseases in terms of shortage of vitamin D,
as well as
 suffering from mental issues
such
 as autism. To reiterate, making children learn foreign languages at primary school might benefit their learning ability and find them knowledge they are interested in.
However
, the negatives including lack of
life
 competencies and problems
such
 as mental and physical have been adversely affected outweigh the said benefits.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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