Some people think that older employees contribute most to the success of a company. Others think that younger people play a more vital role. Discuss both views and give your own opinion
Some argue that the support that senior
employees
provide to a Use synonyms
company
leads to much more success than the one given by Use synonyms
people
at a younger age. Others think completely the opposite. Use synonyms
This
essay agrees that Linking Words
although
older Linking Words
employees
offer an invaluable contribution, Use synonyms
people
with younger and fresher minds might provide new ideas to revolutionise and contribute to any business.
On one hand, old staff members who have gathered plenty of Use synonyms
experience
during long periods of time working in a certain industry or Use synonyms
company
are able to supply all the Use synonyms
problem
-solving skills that are needed in a Use synonyms
company
. All of them have gone through different experiences including serious issues and risk-taking procedures which have given them the awareness of handling different tasks and situations. Use synonyms
For example
, an educational leader (who is usually an old employee) who supervises the correct flow of educational activities offered to the children, might encounter the same Linking Words
problem
many times and apply an accurate and quick solution. Use synonyms
However
, the types of problems found in a Linking Words
company
change with the years which might represent a bigger Use synonyms
problem
for old Use synonyms
employees
.
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On the other hand
, Linking Words
although
young Linking Words
employees
do not possess all the Use synonyms
experience
that senior Use synonyms
employees
might have, they can definitely provide fresh and innovative ideas. With each new generation, not only new perspectives are brought but Use synonyms
also
more Linking Words
people
who are open to dealing with challenges, changes and new starts. Use synonyms
This
means that whenever a Linking Words
company
faces a new Use synonyms
problem
or starts a new project, young Use synonyms
people
will be the first ones to cooperate, presenting new perspectives or ways of solving a Use synonyms
problem
. Use synonyms
For example
, a room leader who is in charge of any room in a childcare centre might not have plenty of Linking Words
experience
, yet Use synonyms
this
person might apply many more strategies Linking Words
due to
his creativity and recent study.
In conclusion, no one denies that older Linking Words
employees
possess vast Use synonyms
experience
which represents a unique advantage when working in a certain Use synonyms
company
or industry for a long time. Use synonyms
Nevertheless
, from my point of view, the innovative insights and variety of ideas that young Linking Words
people
provide could offer many more solutions and Use synonyms
therefore
benefits to any business.Linking Words
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task achievement
While your essay is well-organized and addresses both views adequately, try to present counter-arguments more explicitly to strengthen your discussion. This can show a balance in your argumentation.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay's coherence would benefit from the use of more linking words and phrases to make the connections between your ideas clearer. Words such as 'furthermore', 'moreover', and 'in contrast' can help.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay effectively includes both an introduction and a conclusion, which are critical components of a well-structured essay.
task achievement
Main points and arguments are generally well-supported with relevant examples, enhancing the credibility of your viewpoint.
coherence and cohesion
Logical structure is maintained throughout the essay, making it easy for the reader to follow your line of reasoning.
Your opinion
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