16.The pie charts show the revenue sources and expenditures of a children’s charity in the USA in one year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

16.The pie charts show the revenue sources and expenditures of a children’s charity in the USA in one year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The pie charts below display the income and waste of a charity
of
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children
childrens
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in a year in the United States
Overall
, there are more earnings than
spendings
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. Food had the biggest profit, followed by community contributions,
while
program services had the highest expenditures. About the income, donated food had 86.6% of the
overall
share, the next biggest earnings comes from the community contribution with a little more than one-tenth of the portion, specifically, 10.4%. Program revenue only contributed to a small part, with 2.2%,
while
investment income and government occupied only 0.2% each, and the rest 0,4% comes from other profits. There are three main spendings, where the program services occupied almost all the expenditures, with 95.8%. Fundraising had a proportion of only 2.6% of the
overall
paying out,
while
management and general wastes were 1% less than fundraising.
Finally
, the total earning was $53,561,580
while
the waste was 53,224,896, so there
are
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around
300 000
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300,000
more revenue than expenditures.
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