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The chart below shows the top ten countries with the highest spending on travel in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the top ten countries with the highest spending on travel in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Above
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The above
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 chart shows the top ten countries with the highest spending on travel in 2014. China
showing
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showed
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highest
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the highest
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 spending
whereas
, Taiwan
showing
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showed
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 less spending pattern
compare
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compared
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 to the
others
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other
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counties
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countries
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 in 2014. China
indicating
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a
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the
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 highest travel expenditure
about
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of about
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 110 Billion in 2014
compare
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compared
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 to other developed European
counties
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countries
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such
 as
United
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the United
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states
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States
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, Germany and
United
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the United
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 Kingdom.
This
 is mainly
due to
largest
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the largest
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 population as
china
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China
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 is the largest populated country in the world. When
compare
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comparing
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 European countries United
states
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States
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, Germany and
United
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the United
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 Kingdom
indicating
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indicate
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 similar
pattern
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patterns
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 of spending. Particularly,
United
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the United
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states
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States
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 and Germany
have
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spent similar amounts in 2014.
Moreover
, Asian
counties
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countries
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 Singapore, Korea & Malaysia have
sept
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spent
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 less on travelling as their economy still developing and they
having
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have
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 other
priories
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priorities
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 rather than luxury travelling.
Further
, these countries more
focusing
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focused
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 on budget travelling
this
 is a new trend, especially in
the
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apply
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Asia.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 3 times.
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