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In some countries, many people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Recently, there has
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been
 a rising trend of living by oneself in some countries. In my own perspective, living alone has the potential to bring about benefits on a personal level
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 there remains some impact on
individual
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 cost of living and state of negative emotion. On the one hand, it gives
people
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 time to focus on personal progress and themselves. From
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 personal scale,
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 style of living demands
people
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 to be entirely responsible
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 solely orient their
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. It means that these
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 could cultivate a diverse range of skills ( including: cooking meals, doing housework, repairing broken appliances ) and are able to fully self-improve
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 being more self-reliant.
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,
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 who live alone will have more time to focus on what matters the most to them. Young
people
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 follow
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 trend,
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 holiday more often,explore their interests and abilities and get to know themselves better than individuals who do not.
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, it seems to have detrimental effects on emotional status and cost of living. It is inevitable that
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 living alone will experience
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feelings of isolation, sadness,
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 the lack of emotional support
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 conversation between them with family members and their flatmates.
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 state of mind can worsen when they are faced with
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fears or confronted with work pressure.
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, individuals who live by themselves are likely to deal with a higher cost of living. It is true that when it comes to making ends meet, a one-person household might pay entirely
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 tend to share the payments equally; in
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 sense, perhaps the trend towards living alone is negative.
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, the increasing number of
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 living by themselves may have both positive and negative consequences, particularly in the personal financial and mental aspects.

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