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In some countries today, people are having their first child when they are older. What are the reasons for this? Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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Recently, the issue has been brought into focus as
people
 possess their first
child
 when they are older than their parents in the past. There are a lot of factors affecting
this
 problem, but I think
this
 has more benefits than adverse for
modern
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 style of living now. No one can deny the fact that the average
ages
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 of
people
 who
held
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 weddings
became
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 higher over the past twenty years. The researcher
had
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found that young
people
, especially young men, want to pursue their
career
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 rather than make a family. A familiar example
for
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this
 problem is the rate of single individuals over 30 years old who said that they will never get married in Japan is rapidly increasing,
at
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 around 25
percent
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 in 2020.
However
, it can explain that problem because of the rising price of houses, and cost of living in the big cities. It is the main factor affecting their marriage. Actually, it can
also
 be argued that getting a
child
 when they are older has a lot of advantages for both parents and their son.
Firstly
, at that point, parents usually had a stable job with a good salary. It could be enough to pay for the cost of meat and school for their
child
. So that, children may live in hygienic surroundings and be encouraged to grow their talent.
However
,
for
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women pregnant when they are over 35 years old could have plenty of difficulties and danger. In conclusion,
people
 nowadays prefer to get married and have their first
child
 later than other generations before. It could have many benefits
such
 as higher education and health for both children and them but difficulties
pregnant
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Shift
  • Trend
  • Societal norms
  • Education and career
  • Financial stability
  • Reproductive technologies
  • Delayed marriages
  • Parenting responsibilities
  • Life expectancy
  • Family planning
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