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Question: in many countries today,parents are able to choose to send their children to single sex schools or co educational schools. Some people think that children going to o single sex schools have disadvantages latter in life. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Parents in a lot of countries have two options where they can admit their
children
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, these are
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sex
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 and co-educational
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 it is said that
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schools
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 have negative effects on
children
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 with their future development in
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. I completely disagree
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 view and I will explain why in
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 essay. First of all,
same
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schools
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 provide a focus and more conducive learning environment for students.
According to
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 a study
in
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 the University of London,
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 type of
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schools
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 boosts their academic performance and
confirdence
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confidence
, especially with traditionally considered gender-biased subjects,
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 as mathematics and science.
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,
this
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 may reduce distractions that potentially may arise in the presence of
opposite
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 gender,
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 as dating, bullying, or sexual harassment.
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,
single
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sex
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schools
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 may help
children
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 to reach their full potential and there is a higher chance for them to achieve their goals in
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, enrolling their
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 in a
same
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sex
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 school would not necessarily isolate them from their opposite gender or society. In fact, they incorporate a lot of activities that
helps
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 them socialise with their opposite
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,
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 as
extracurriccular
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extracurricular
 activities, community services, sports, or clubs.
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, they teach them to appreciate and respect people's differences regardless of their race, gender, or ethnicity.
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, they develop their emotional and social skills that will enable them to adapt
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 various situations later on. In conclusion, I disagree that
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sex
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schools
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 disadvantages
in
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apply
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children
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 later in
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, I believe that these
schools
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 will help students improve their academic performance and personal growth. They may
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 open their minds to different
culutural
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cultural
 and social diversity, which would greatly enhance their adaptability
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 in
life
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, it appears to me that it is
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 best option for parents to send their
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in
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single
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schools
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • single-sex schools
  • co-educational schools
  • academic focus
  • distractions
  • socialization
  • peer pressure
  • soft skills
  • parental guidance
  • career success
  • gender-stereotyped activities
  • personal development
  • cultural norms
  • adolescence
  • identity formation
  • long-term success
  • societal influence
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