In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

In some countries,

children

are taught that they have to try hard if they want to achieve their goals. In my opinion,

this

statement can encourage

children

to overcome difficulties rather than give up and build them to be a resilient person.

As a result

, these characters can contribute to their

success

in the future.

However

, at the same time, it

also

can contribute to the mental illness of the

children

such

as frustration, anxiety, and self-blame.

To begin

with, being a successful person can be attributed

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our hard

work

. Encouraging

children

to stay persistent when facing challenges can

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them overcome difficulties and find solutions to problems.

Furthermore

, they can learn from their mistakes and use setbacks as opportunities for growth.

Moreover

,

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children

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back from adversity, they can build resilience and come back stronger. As an example, my sister had experience in making croissants. After several trials, she always failed.

Nevertheless

, she never gave up and she had learned from her mistake. When she tried again, she could handle the obstacle. Eventually, she succeeded in making a good croissant. She was so happy and she felt proud of her perseverance.

Therefore

, by picking themselves up and persevering, they can achieve their goals and experience

success

.

Conversely

, there are

also

a number of potential downsides for

children

to

this

massage, namely mental illness. If

children

are constantly told that they can achieve anything through hard

work

alone, it may lead them to overlook the role that other factors play in

success

,

such

as education, luck, privilege, and society.

Additionally

,

this

could ultimately result in feelings of frustration, self-blame, and demotivation if they do not achieve the outcomes they desire. To illustrate, I have read an article that said Japanese students had an enormous amount of pressure at a very early age to perform well academically from their parents to achieve a better chance at the shrinking pool of good jobs.

Therefore

, most of them experienced several mental illnesses

such

as feelings of anxiety and stress.

To sum up

, the message that

children

can attain anything through hard

work

has its advantages in terms of building confidence, resilience, and motivation.

Nonetheless

, it is essential to consider the potential drawbacks

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in mental illness. I hope that parents and teachers

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motivate

children

to

work

hard but

also

take into consideration other factors that are important for their

success

.