The chart below shows the results of three surveys on absenteeism in a particular European country in the years 2000, 2005 and 2010. The results show the reasons people gave for not going to work. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of three surveys on absenteeism in a particular European country in the years 2000, 2005 and 2010. The results show the reasons people gave for not going to work.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of absenteeism for five reasons
such
as illness,
stress
,
person
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needs, family responsibilities, and unexpected
problems
in a country in Europe during a ten-year period from 2000 to 2010.
Overall
, there were many significant changes during the period.
While
the percentages of
stress
, personal needs, and unexpected
problems
increased over time, the figures for other types decreased. It can be clearly observed from the chart that the highest percentage of
three
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surveys was allocated for illness at nearly 45% in comparison with around 27% for family responsibilities, 14% for
person
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needs, and under 8% for unexpected
problems
and
stress
in 2000. After five years,
while
the proportion of
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personal
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person
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personal
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needs and unexpected
problems
experienced a slight increase of over 5%, there was a moderate decrease of under 5%
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other types of reasons. In the following five years, the proportion of
person
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needs was roughly 23%, which was double that of
stress
.
By contrast
, the figures for illness and unexpected
problems
saw a gradual decline to 35% and nearly 15% respectively.
Besides
, the percentage of family responsibilities in 2010 was the same as in 2005 (at 25%).
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words stress, person, problems with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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