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Many foods are shipped from far away. Some people think that eating local food is more environmentally and economically. Do you think the advantages outweigh its disadvantages?

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It is believed by some people that eating local
food
 has more advantages as compared to consuming imported
food
 items.
This
 can deprive people of having a cultural experience by trying
food
 from different countries but
nevertheless
, it is economically beneficial for the local
shop
owners
. I would argue that the benefits certainly outweigh the drawbacks. The greatest benefit of purchasing more local
food
 items is that it is economically beneficial to the local market and
shop
owners
. The more sales they make, the more income the
shop
owners
 will generate and the more famous their
shop
 will become. Tourists,
for example
, play a huge role in making a small
food
shop
 famous and popular for its
food
 by promoting it through uploading pictures on their social media handles.
Although
this
 might not be a big deal for tourists who have a huge number of followers on their social media handles, it makes a huge difference for the
shop
owners
 as their sales can drastically rise
due to
this
 small action. Even though the advantages may seem to have a big role, the disadvantages can't be ignored. The biggest drawback of only having local
food
 items in the market is that the public won't get a chance to taste other unique flavours from various countries. If they don't try out different flavours, they will be deprived of a cultural experience that they can have.
For example
, for a chef it can be a disadvantage for him if he is entering in an international competition,
that is
 if he has only tried his own local
food
 and does not know the taste of other international dishes.
Therefore
, by making
this
 decision society not only gains economic benefits but faces disadvantages
such
 as not getting the opportunity to try new unique flavors of imported
food
.
Nevertheless
, I believe that the advantages are more important than the disadvantages.
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Provide a clear thesis statement in the introduction that directly answers the question.
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Develop your arguments further by providing more specific examples and explanations.
coherence cohesion
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon emissions
  • transportation
  • environmentally friendly
  • economically beneficial
  • local farmers
  • local economy
  • fresher
  • nutritious
  • food security
  • imports
  • preserving
  • traditional farming practices
  • biodiversity
  • limited variety
  • availability
  • cost
  • contributor
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