33.Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviours. Other disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

Some say that when

individuals

travel, they should respect the culture of those places,

while

others believe that

people

should accept and welcome other

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civilization

and their way of thinking.

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essay would argue that

although

experiencing other cultures can allow

people

to know more, humans should accept how

individuals

are. On the one hand, following local customs and thoughts will allow

people

to learn and know more about how

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people

live in those places. So the tourists can enjoy activities that the country does

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if that was their country, so they can have better experiences.

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the same time,

this

will allow

people

to be aware of protecting cultures and history that it is followed only by a small number of

people

.

For example

, in

China

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there are many minority ethnic groups, each of them with different

type

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of traditions, but most of the Chinese

people

do not know what

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the others really do,

then

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the possibility of letting

people

to

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dress and follow their culture makes

people

to remember the existence of those minority ethnic groups exist.

However

, I believe that

this

can be a way of learning, but do not need to be mandatory

On the other hand

, since the world is increasingly globalized, there are too many

people

travelling from one place to another, and sometimes they may stay in other nations. Most

of

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individuals

follow different cultures and religion, and

this

is because of religious

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or their national tradition, so they have been following it all their lives,

then

,

this

need to be respected even if they are in other

countries

,

this

will show that the country is open and friendly to every type of

people

.

For instance

, European

countries

have a lot of citizens that come from other nations, in some Asian

countries

individuals

are obligated to cover their hair and in others their

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,

also

most

of

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Indian

people

do not eat beef because

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cows are sacred

for

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them. In Europe

this

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people

are allowed to do what they want, if that were not the case,

then

there

will

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not be a bond between

countries

. I believe

this

point of view is preferable because

this

will allow a better relationship between all

countries

and

peopel

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people

in the world. In conclusion,

although

following

religions

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of other

countries

can make the tourists feel

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at home,

people

should welcome everyone that

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different culture and customs since we are in a globalized world.