Parents should encourage children to spend less time in studies and more time in physical activities. To what extent do you agree?

There are two different views of the people if children should invest more time in

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education

or in outdoor activities. In my opinion ,

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support both sides as it is equally important in an individual's life. On one hand, there are two major reasons

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why teenagers should focus on

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education

first and foremost.

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, because the competition has

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and

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requires

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knowledgable and skilled workers that can be acquired only if students fully focus on

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their

studies .

Secondly

, for

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admissions in higher

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. High grades will get them into

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university ,

otherwise

, they will have to go to a normal college that will lack good career

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opportunities

.

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, in American-based companies, it is prominent to pass IQ level

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prior to their final level and

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of higher institutions will

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students based on their scores on previous courses.

Thus

, spending more time on

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education

will be worthwhile for their future.

On the other hand

,

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activities are

also

equally important for every human and if they

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do them they might suffer from stress, anxiety and unhealthy bodily problems. Parents should encourage their kids to spend much more time in healthy physical activities and motivate them to do physical exercising by participating in sports , dance competitions etc.

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can be achieved by other ways like schools including them in their curriculum during school hours. Children

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, eat junk foods and have a regular habit of consuming them. Some kind of recreation will help them be fit and healthy.

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, a study shows that 70% of schools and colleges have included physical education in their curriculum , in order to make their students have

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healthy life. In conclusion, though scoring good marks in school is imperative , exercising is

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equally important or else , the children might feel overwhelmed with their education .