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Studies show that crime rates are lower among those with educational degrees. Therefore, the best way to reduce the crime is to educate criminals while they are still in prison. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Skilled, multi-faceted PMP certified Program/Project manager of complex IT and R&D
projects
 owning all stages of the lifecycle to deliver
projects
 that exceed expectations on time and on budget, offering exceptional performance through responsible management positions. Expert in Business Analysis, business architect, and consultant with the ability to develop new products and streamline organizational processes by finding solutions in a broad range of IT and R&D
projects
 across diverse fields. Experienced Project/Program Manager in development that required creating an architectural solution with
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 of internal and external systems and services.
Organizer
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 of work between different departments and organizations (
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project
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) without direct reporting relationships, online, offline, and in
the
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different time zones. Work closely with C-level management, the Engineering Leads,
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Designers, and specialists. Creator of the inner IT StartUp from scratch in the organization with more than
10 000
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10,000
 employees which gradually replaced some contractors and developed a number of services and systems.
Negotiator
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 with
ability
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 to build
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 working
relationship
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 with Stakeholders and successfully complete
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crisis
projects
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Multicultural
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 expert whose experience
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 PMI and IPMA volunteering, and Jury member in the Innompic Games.
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