In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this positive or negative development. Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays, there are many people living in the
countryside
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decide to move to urban areas, which leads to a decreasing number of populations in the
countryside
. I personally believe that
this
trend is totally harmful. One quite serious problem that can result from leaving the
countryside
to move to cities is air pollution.
In particular
,
due to
the significant increase
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city dwellers,
this
tendency may create a greenhouse effect, which is
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of the disease as well. To exemplify
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point,
according to
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of
researches
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, erratic weather conditions will create
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environments that contribute to the development of harmful bacteria for a long time. Another issue which should not be overlooked is that moving to metropolitan areas uncontrollably
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is more likely to make food an imbalance situation. To illustrate
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point, it leads to a decreasing
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decline in the production of agricultural outputs.
For instance
,
due to
the lack of agricultural human resources to grow rice and fruit trees, people living in the nation must struggle with a shortage of food.
As a result
, leaving rural residences is able to influence food security in a negative way.
Besides
, the one of advantages brought to rural's lives is that they may access
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useful knowledge. To explain, because cities
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contain universities and institutes, which is
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place to study.
For example
, they can study more new agricultural technology,which
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harmful to their career. In conclusion, the trend of leaving the
countryside
for urban cities seems to be
an
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unfavorable
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progress is damaging implications for society, human health and life quality. In my opinion,
this
tendency has a negative effect.
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