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Poor nutrition and obesity is a problem in many developed countries and some people believe that a tax on fast food would reduce the problem. Do you agree?

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Nowadays, malnutrition and fatness have become an issue in many developed countries and some people assert that a tax on junk
food
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 would decrease the problem.
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, I strongly disagree with that
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 reasons which will be discussed in the following paragraph.
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 with, the main cause of
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 problem is lifestyle. Because of a busy routine, people tend to have instant meals to save the day.
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, an employee who has an express lunchtime
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 still working on some tasks orders a burger that can be served within 5-10 minutes. Regardless of the price, that worker still purchases junk
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 anyway.
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, fast
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 restaurants are ubiquitous
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 healthy restaurants are pretty rare, especially in communal spaces
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 as malls or
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 courts . Even though a nutritious diet is cheaper than unhealthy
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, these delicacies are not available to consumers.
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overweightness is not solely caused by chosen meals, but
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the
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 whole routine in a person's life.
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, a man who occasionally eats instant
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 but still gains weight because of very little of the activities he does every day. In
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 case, higher prices on junk
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 won’t affect his health.
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, the tax idea doesn’t work effectively on alcohol or cigarettes. These things could be reduced in educational approaches like caution banners or healthy
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 advertisements. In conclusion, I believe that the tax won’t resolve the obesity and poor nutrition problem. It comes from daily demands and the availability of fast
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 itself. The solutions should come from the educational technique
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