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Some people believe that schools should teach foreign languages to primary children. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

#people #schools #languages #children
In the
last
 few decades, knowing only one
language
 is not enough anymore and parents are trying to make their
children
 learn a new
language
 to speak
besides
 their native
language
 and
this
 has become more important in Asia. I believe that being able to understand another
language
 or even an accent can be really helpful in human life. In
this
essay
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 I am going to discuss the pros and cons of learning a new
language
 at a very young age. Learning a foreign
language
 at a young age has several advantages for students.
Firstly
, youngsters do not have much homework to do or they are not forced to work outside, so they have a lot of time to learn new things. In fact, they can understand faster because they do not have to think about serious things and they are not anxious like the older generation.
Secondly
, learning a new
language
 can be an exercise for
children
's brains.
Also
, it can help with memory improvement. The more the brain is used, the better it works.
For instance
, when
children
 learn new vocabulary and grammar, they can talk to their friends and try to remember the meaning of words, and they can even make it like a game for themselves and use it as the code
language
.
On the other hand
, learning a foreign
language
 at
school
, especially for young ages,
it
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can be difficult, since they have just started
school
 and they may be stressed and pressured by extra homework.
For example
, they may not be able to study for more important subjects like
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 or Science, and if they do not get a good score there can be a lot of pressure from their family and
school
.
To conclude
,
children
's minds are more receptive than adults' minds, so they can learn more quickly.
However
, learning a new
language
 should not make
children
 anxious,
otherwise
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 they cannot focus on more important things. In my view, learning a foreign
language
 at
school
 is a wonderful idea, but it should be optional for primary students.
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  • Cultural awareness
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  • Linguistic understanding
  • Academic opportunities
  • Professional opportunities
  • Mother tongue
  • Curriculum
  • Interconnected world
  • Foster
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