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Demand for gas and oil is increasing and so finding new resources in remote and untouched areas is a necessity. Do the advantages of this outweigh its disadvantages

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Due to
 the growth of the population, requests for natural
resources
such
 as
oil
 and gas increase every day, and their extraction is becoming essential in distant zones.
This
 essay will analyze the pros and cons of finding new
resources
 in untouched regions. The two main advantages of gas and
oil
 production in undamaged areas are the opportunity to find other new
resources
 and ensure people's lives.
Firstly
, since the region is untouched, there is a big chance to discover new minerals and the land itself. It can be minerals
such
 as coal, peat, and ore.
Moreover
, remote land, which was extracted can be better than the previous ones.
Due to
 the fact that touched zones were used a lot for discovering sources.
Secondly
, owing to
oil
 people use transport, as
this
 resource extracts fuel. Gas is equally helpful since it is being used in energetics and
additionally
, a lot of buildings are heated by
this
 substance.
However
, despite the pros of requests for natural sources in distant zones, it has cons as environmental pollution. Mining operations release hydrogen and carbon, which greatly affects the air and leads to serious consequences, an example is the deterioration of human health and the atmosphere. Another disadvantage may be that
due to
 the huge
oil
 reserves on earth, people are not looking for alternative methods of resource extraction, which could pollute the environment less.
To conclude
,
although
 the extraction of natural
resources
 in remote areas has drawbacks as ecology pollution, it has a lot of benefits. I consider that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages
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