The graph below gives information about the percentages of the population in four Asia countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the Philippines
Thailand
, and Indonesia.
Overall
, the population
in the given cities are in the trend of increase. Especially, the number of people who has
started living in the city of Malaysia soared so fast, which takes first place among the all figures except for 1970 and 1990.
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followed by Philippines
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Thailand
. It had the least
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population
rate
until 2000, however
, it rocketed from then
so fast, and it is predicted to be 60% in 2040. The third largest figure
is Philippines
, which will occupy 50% in 2040. In 1970 and 1990, It had Correct article usage
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than Malaysia, which was 31% and 50% but it slapped again. The last
figure
is Thailand
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the city
population
, differently from others. in 2040. But, between 1970 and 2000, the rate
of Thailand
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comparing
with Indonesia.
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