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The diagram describes how many changes had Queen Mary hospital since Sarah construction starting in 1960.

The diagram describes how many changes had Queen Mary hospital since Sarah construction starting in 1960.
The diagram describes how many changes had Queen Mary
hospital
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Hospital
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 since
Sarah
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Sarah's
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 construction starting in 1960.
Overall
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 comparison of the tree diagrams reveals a change from
first
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the first
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 buildings were more developed infrastructures. In 1960,
place
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the place
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 had much smaller facilities than
1980
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in 1980
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 and 2000. But during the next 20 years hospital experienced a number of chops and changes . The most noticeable is that in 1980
Shopping
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the Shopping
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Centre
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replaced
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was replaced
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 by
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Cancer
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the Cancer
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Centre
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 and
hospital
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the hospital
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concluded
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was concluded
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 with
pharmacy
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a pharmacy
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.
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 ,a new Nursing School appeared because of demolishing farmland. Only a car park
together with
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Hospital
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the Hospital
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 remained in their territory . Buy 2000 block of
cancer
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centre
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 had been grown up and took nursing school’s place for a
while
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.
Cancer
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centre
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centres
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 increased terrain beginning
from
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in
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 1980. It’s clear that Queen Mary’s Hospital modified in
right
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the right
a right
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 way in 40 years of transformation
also
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,every year of
devoloping
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developing
 brought different types of knowledge in different spheres,starting from
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Cancer
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the Cancer
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centre
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 .

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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words centre, cancer with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "describes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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