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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011-2018

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011-2018
The line graph reveals the information in numbers, how many
shops
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 were closed and opened over 7 years.
Overall
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, it is noticeable that at the beginning of the given
period
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, the number of closures was lower than opening stores. Despite
this
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,
at the end
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 of the
period
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 of closures
shops
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 remained dominant. In 2011, just under 9000
shops
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 opened, but
this
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 figure sharply dropped to 4000, experiencing a significant downward trend until 2012. After increasing steadily, the number of opening stores started to decline considerably until 2018, till 3000.
Initially
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, the figure remained considerably more than 6000 of closures stores, afterwards there was a fluctuation over 4-years, followed by a steep plunge until 2015 (slightly under 1000).
By contrast
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, the amount of these
shops
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 witnessed the sharpest changes reaching above 5000 in 2016. Another prominent feature of the data is that until the end of the
period
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, there was a
period
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 of stability.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words shops, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "considerably" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • decline
  • surge
  • stabilize
  • correlation
  • economic conditions
  • consumer behavior
  • technological advancements
  • urban development
  • employment
  • retail sector
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