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The maps illustrate the changes from 1986 to the present day in town of Denham.

The maps illustrate the changes from 1986 to the present day in town of Denham.
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The maps illustrate the changes from 1986 to the present day in
town
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the town
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 of Denham.
Overall
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, a difference between the two maps reveals a change from
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a predominant
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predominant
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predominantly
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 rural to a mainly urban landscape. In 1986, there
were
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was
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 more farmland in the city, and
ares
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areas
 with farmlands occupied more ground than now. The most noticeable is that
number
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the number
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 of houses
is
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has
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 grown
up
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apply
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and large
house
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houses
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 replaced by retirement
home
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homes
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.
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, a new industrial estate with
modified
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the modified
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 size of primary school. Farmlands were cleared to make way for individual houses.
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,
west
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the west
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 side of town stayed without reconstructions,
as well as
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bridge
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a bridge
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 in
north
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the north
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.
Furthermore
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, shops
are
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were
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 beside the road in 1986, they are not visible
in
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on
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map
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the map
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os
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of
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present
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the present
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 day. Getting back to the details, a territory large house is
considerable
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considerably
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 bigger than
retirement
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a retirement
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 home.
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, gardens were displaced. In
the
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apply
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conclusion, the map has not undergone any changes between 1986 and now.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrate" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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