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Some cities have days when cars and other forms of transport are banned from the city centre. Only buses, bicycles and taxis are allowed to be in the city centre. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, in some cases, apart from public transport and bicycles, other types of vehicles are banned from the
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centre
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 for some reason. I consider that the pros would exceed the cons because there would less a amount of chemical toxins emitted from
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 and the
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centre
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safer, especially for children
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, over the past few decades, there has been a dramatic increase of toxic elements in the air's composition. One of the main causes of
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 situation is carbon dioxide
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 emitted from vehicles around the world. Especially, in the megapolis'
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 there are plenty of
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 and other forms of transportation that emit chemical elements every moment. If they are banned, the
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 would contain much more fresh air which can lead to positive effects on the environment and people's opinion about the
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. On top of that, in the
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, almost always there are
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 and motorbikes that drive at a rapid pace. It can be very hazardous because children may not know about inner-
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 rules and run to the main road without knowing it is dangerous. What's more, there are a lot of older people who have low eyesight or poor hearing. They may not notice fast
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 and the end will not be good. Unless they are banned, it would have several disadvantages for citizens. In conclusion, all the aforementioned points illustrate that not allowing vehicles to drive in the
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 is safer for the public and nature at the same time.
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