The table below presents the number of children ever born to women aged 40-44 years in Australia for each year the information was collected since 1981.

The table below presents the number of children ever born to women aged 40-44 years in Australia for each year the information was collected since 1981.
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The table below compares the Australian
women
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aged 40-44
years
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according to
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the number of their children in four different
years
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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there
had
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been a gradual decline in the proportion of
women
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who had
three
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kids
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or more, since 1981.
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, the rate of Australian
women
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who had none, one or two
kids
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, increased during the mentioned period. In 1981, the number of 40-44-year-old
women
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who had never experienced being a mother was 8.5%.
while
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, the proportion of having one or two
kids
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was 7.6% and 29%, respectively. In the following
years
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, these
three
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figures
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slowly to reach their highest level
at the end
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of the period.
Moreover
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, in 2006 the figure for having one child doubled,
although
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it was lower than two others at first. The trends for the popularity of having
three
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, four and even more
kids
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, saw a slow decrease during four different
years
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(1981,1986,1996 and 2006). Meanwhile, the figure for having
three
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children which
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27.4% in 1981 experienced a small change in fall over the
years
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to reach 21.5%,
while
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the figure for 4
kids
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or more that had a second rate of popularity at initiation, decreased remarkably to stand at lowest proportion among all figures in 2006 (11%).
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words women, years, three, kids with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fertility rate
  • demographic shift
  • age cohort
  • workforce implications
  • government policy
  • birth rate fluctuations
  • education level
  • career advancement
  • reproductive health
  • family planning
  • socio-economic factors
  • population pyramid
  • life expectancy
  • childbearing age
  • maternity leave
  • contraceptive methods
  • population growth rate
  • average family size
  • maternal health
  • census data
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