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The graph below gives information about the percentages of the population in four Asia countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentages of the population in four Asia countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 line graph shows the data about
population
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 percentages in four countries located in Asia,
also
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 the graph
expressing
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 both past and future
period
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, which is from 1970 to 2020, and
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 the expected
population
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to
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for
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 the next years from 2030 to 2040.
According to
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 what is shown. It is
clears
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 that Malaysia is going to have a huge
increasing
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increase
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 level
comparing
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compared
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 with the other countries, and that
because
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 as we can see,
Malaysia
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Malaysia's
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population
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percentage
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on
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in
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 1979 was 30%, but it is expected that the
percentage
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going to growth
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 with
the
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apply
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time intel it is reach around 80% on 2040. As regards
from
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the data given, Indonesia will be the lowest country of the
population
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percentage
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, and that
because
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is because
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its
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 is going to be 50%
on
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in
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 2040. To
sub
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sum
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 up, we could say that with the time running all 4
countries
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countries'
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 levels of
population
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percentage
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 are going to be increased.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentages
  • population
  • Asia
  • countries
  • urban population
  • China
  • India
  • Japan
  • Indonesia
  • increased
  • decreasing
  • projected
  • predicted
  • peaked
  • declining
  • steadily
  • rate of increase
  • comparisons
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