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The graph below gives information about the number of Catholics residing in different nations, during 2010-2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below gives information about the number of Catholics residing in different nations, during 2010-2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The given bar graph illustrates
the
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how many
Catholic
people
 live in six countries (China, India,
Philiphines
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Philippines
, Vietnam, Korea and Japan) from 2010 to 2013.
Overall
,
according
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according to
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this
 chart most
Cathalic
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Catholic
people
 in
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 and the least
people
 live in Japan. In 2010 and 2013 the highest
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number of Chatholic
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Chatholic
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Catholic
people
 in
Philippines
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the Philippines
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,
75,940,000
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were 75,940,000
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 and 72,000,000 respectively, but the figures showed
the
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a
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decreased
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of
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in
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 Catholics in 2013. India is
next
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the next
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 highest country, in 2010 it was 10,570,000 and in 2013
number
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the number
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 of Catholics grew up to 19,000,000, in 2013,
number
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the number
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 of
people
has
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almost doubled. In both years, Vietnam Catholics population
closely
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was closely
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 equal, in 2010, 5,590,000 and in 2013, 5,321,168, anyhow,
Catholic
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the Catholic
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 number of
people
 dropped in Vietnam in 2013.
Similarly
,
Korea
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in Korea
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also
Catholic
popultaion
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population
 reduced, in 2013 clearly
we
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can see
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considerble
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considerable
considerably
 dropped it was 1,319,190 and in 2010 it was 5,270,000. Japan had the least
Catholic
 population, which
was
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accounted
at
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for
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 400,000 in 2010 and in 2013, 509,000.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words catholic, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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