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Some people prefer to go to gym and clubs for health care other say that walking and jumping stairs are more affective. Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #gym #clubs #health #care #stairs #affective
In
this
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these
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 modern times, gym and clubs for
health
 care
has
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have
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 become more popular
due to
 the
increase
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increased
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 use of social media and fame by self exposing. It would differ in different age groups, people of old age would prefer walking and climbing stairs rather than going to a gym
whereas
 youngsters would choose
gym
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the gym
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 as the excitement and every to work up is more among them which is more of focusing on gaining muscles, abs rather than focusing on
health
where as
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whereas
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 in aged people it much of focused on
health
 and diet. In my
opinion
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opinion,
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 both are equally
affective
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effective
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 depending on the purpose you have for getting involved in the activity.
As it
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It
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 is not possible for
a an
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an
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 aged person to run
on
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apply
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a trade mill at the age of 70
for maintaining
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to maintain
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 good
health
 and would end up with some other problem,
where as
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whereas
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 a young teenager would find it lazy to
do walking
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walk
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