The media is increasing interest in famous people who have ordinary backgrounds. Why do you think people are interested in the lives of famous people? Do you think this is a good thing?

Celebrities are very popular these days, because of the status, they earned after coming from basic backgrounds. Some
people
are so inspired from their lives, that they follow every step of their. It could be a good or bad thing, we will discuss
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, tik-tok
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, makes
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person
's daily life activities so viral that a common
person
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,
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right inspiration is the key
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success. These popular persons
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the role of dedication in
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dance, he or she will follow his or her favourite dancer, so that he or she will be able to gain their desired level.
On the other hand
, following someone is always not a good thing, sometimes it could have
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effect on one's
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, if, we fail to choose the right role model.
Moreover
,
people
end up with suicide or depression, if they fail to do the same.
To sum up
, it depends on a
person
's role model and on his mentality.
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  • celebrity
  • ordinary backgrounds
  • interest
  • curiosity
  • fascination
  • escapism
  • entertainment
  • inspiration
  • motivation
  • identification
  • relatability
  • social comparison
  • envy
  • public interest
  • negative effects
  • excessive focus
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