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The media is increasing interest in famous people who have ordinary backgrounds. Why do you think people are interested in the lives of famous people? Do you think this is a good thing?

#media #interest #people #backgrounds #lives
Celebrities are very popular these days, because of the status, they earned after coming from basic backgrounds. Some
people
 are so inspired from their lives, that they follow every step of their. It could be a good or bad thing, we will discuss
about
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this
further
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for instance
,
instagram
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, tik-tok
etecetera
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etcetera
, makes
well known
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person
's daily life activities so viral that a common
person
 sees himself or herself in them.
To
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 addition, as
people
says
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,
that
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 right inspiration is the key
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 success. These popular persons
plays
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 the role of dedication in
people
's lives. To exemplify, if a
person
 likes to
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dance, he or she will follow his or her favourite dancer, so that he or she will be able to gain their desired level.
On the other hand
, following someone is always not a good thing, sometimes it could have
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devastated
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 effect on one's
lives
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, if, we fail to choose the right role model.
Moreover
,
people
 end up with suicide or depression, if they fail to do the same.
To sum up
, it depends on a
person
's role model and on his mentality.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • celebrity
  • ordinary backgrounds
  • interest
  • curiosity
  • fascination
  • escapism
  • entertainment
  • inspiration
  • motivation
  • identification
  • relatability
  • social comparison
  • envy
  • public interest
  • negative effects
  • excessive focus
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