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Many people believe that social networking sites ike Facebook have had a negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience Write at least 250 words.

#people #sites #ike #facebook #impact #individuals #society
Entertainment has always been a prime concern of
people
 since time immemorial. social
media
 is one of the latest and most popular entertainment
method
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methods
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 in the modern era. Some
people
belives
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believe
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 that it creates
negative
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a negative
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 impact on society
as well as
 users. I
am partially agree
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to
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with
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 the statement because it has merits and
demerit
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demerits
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. There are enormous
cosative
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causative
positive
 factors
for
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 my opinion. On the one hand, there are some
advatages
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advantages
for
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of
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 modern
media
.
Firstly
,
this
 is an
advances
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 communication
methord
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method
 which is mostly
using
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. There are
number
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a number
the number
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 of
platform
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platforms
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 providing communication
feature
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features
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such
 as
face book
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facebook
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, Instagram, WhatsApp and so on. We are able to easily access
who
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those who
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lives
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live
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 abroad with the advent of technology.
moreover
, it is helping the
contant
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content
 creators and the business to reach
theire
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their
 customers. it is not only for fun but
also
 for business activities. we can
also
use
 it as an e-commerce platform.
On the other hand
,
although
 it has
advantage
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advantages
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, it has many
disadvatage
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disadvantages
disadvantage
.
Initially
, most of the individuals are addicted to modern
media
especially
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 the youngsters. Most of the
people
 waste their precious time on
their
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them
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 and they are getting addicted.
In addition
, some
people
use
 it
for
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to
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 connect with strangers. It
maybe
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may
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affects
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affect
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 their life and
carrier
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career
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.
Although
 it provides important information and news
fastly
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,
some times
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sometimes
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deliver
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delivers
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 fake news.
To conclude
,
the
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social
media
 is an inevitable invention for
human
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humans
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 because it provides many usable features for modern
people
. We should learn how to
use
 social
media
 in a good manner. In my opinion, every invention
have
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has
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 positive and negative sides and it depends
how
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on how
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 we
use
 them.
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