The bar chart below shows the different types of accommodation chosen by the British when they went on holiday in 2010.

The bar chart below shows the different types of accommodation chosen by the British when they went on holiday in 2010.
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The bar graph illustrates which types of
accommodation
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were the most and the least popular by percentage in the United Kingdom in 2010.
Overall
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, The most popular in all countries was a hotel. Anyway, The least popular
one
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was different in each country.
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the hotel was the most popular choice during holidays in the United Kingdom in 2010 with 45 to 55
percent
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compared to the others.
On the other hand
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, the caravan was the least popular in England and Wales, which were less than 10
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percent
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of chosen in both countries. By the way, The least popular
accommodation
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in Scotland was camping, it was
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approximately 10
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percent
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of the choices. At the same time, in Northern Ireland, There were 2 different kinds of
accommodation
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which were the least
one
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at the same percentage.
One
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was camping and another was self-catering with an estimated 10
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percent
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of chosen in both types.
To sum up
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, the most chosen
accommodation
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for vacation time in the entire United Kingdom in 2010 was similar, it was the hotel.
Conversely
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, the least chosen were not the same in each country. In England and Wales, the least was
caravan
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a caravan
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. But camping was the least popular
one
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in Scotland.
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, both self-catering and camping were the least popular in Northern Ireland.
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